From that day forward, Gertie slept in the house.
Not well—seven restless souls frequented her bed, unaware of the hour, caring not that she required peace of her own. And she would walk the earth in a stupor, empty and unseeing, a slave unable to pick, or fetch, or serve even herself.
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and she will carry them, in the silence of her tortured heart...home
I sense the loss of innocence here, a once childlike heart now and forever owned by darkness
This exerpt gives me a sense of sadness.
Oh and by the way...The photos that you provide with all your excerpts are glorious. I wish I could step into each one of them.
As sad as this excerpt is, it is rich with emotion, compassion, and character. I like Rene's comments. Well put, Rene. And Chuck, so beautifully written.
I can't imagine what tragic event led to her losing her self, but I sense her pain.
Soulfully and beautifully written.
I love the photo. It fits. It brings to mind the gospel song "I'll Fly Away"
When the shadows of this life have gone,
I'll fly away;
Like a bird from prison bars has flown,
I'll fly away (I'll fly away)
'Morning Chuck~
Gertie...even in weakness, I 'see' her strength in these powerful words.
And, possibly, a peek into Jule's
bloodline...love where you take us with
each reading.
I am blown away by this photo! How lucky
you are to be surrounded by such beauty...
and to capture those gulls in flight~
talk about perfect timing, sir!
In that house I see a huge portrait of compassion, rich tones of caring for one who can no longer serve.
Deep
Dark
Sad,
yet . . .
I see strength,
courage in the spirit of this character.
Nicely written!
somehow
you all
make me want to
give more attention
to mere "passing" scenes.
somehow
your comments
make these people
more real, deserving of my best.
thank you!
Shhhhh, "be vewy, vewy quiet..." I'm not here ;-) But, oh... Wish I could shout from the rooftop!! I LOVE this...I have just polished a piece about my mom for publication this coming Saturday...and you have captured someone very like her in fiction!!! Gertie is a beautiful, selfless soul...I suspect she has many dreams of her own...but she loves deeply...and offers unfathomable wisdom and sacrifice in her daily interactions with others...I especially love this line, "offering peace when no deeper peace could be had." This character truly resonates with me! Wonderful! Hugs, Janine
Beautiful chuck and so melancholy...
Chuck,
So many of us are haunted by events of the past and this is such a perfectly written passage.
No matter which character you write about, it is so easy to see the world from their perspective, whether male or female.
Both you and your writing are indeed an amazing gift.
Thanks for letting us share in the unique experience of writing a novel.
Smiles for your photo...smiles for your well-chosen words that fill us with emotion...smiles to you....
Yesterday I felt so similar to Gertie. Today I am a little more optimistic although concerned I have no more to give. Do you remember the 70's song that has a line ". . . strummin' my life with his fingers"? Sometimes your words do the same thing.
You always leave a picture in my mind, leaving me wanting more..
wow! really poignantly beautiful chuck - softly but strongly compassionate and caring - another dimension to the character - really so well done!
Wow this is beautiful. It feels like a different book from your other excerpts...it is a different tone.
much love
Nice, Chuck. A soft and subtle scene.
Chuck, this excerpt (as all of them are), is amazing. You bring forth so much emotion and power with just a few lines. I get the feeling that this book is going to be HUGE! Seriously. I'm looking forward to more.
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